In writing we are learning to elaborate on our ideas and use a hook at the start of our writing. We wrote a recount about our holidays. My hook is Whooo weee this is tiring I have elaborated on how I felt when I was there I used WOW!!! words to elaborate on ideas.
Hook- Whooo weee this is tiring that's what I was like at Washington Skatepark
Hook- Whooo weee this is tiring that's what I was like at Washington Skatepark
Me and my family,Holidays,Washington,Fun time,with mum dad and brothers and sisters,outside Skatepark,Lollies,KFC,Friend
When- on Saturday in the holidays
Where- Washington Skatepark
Who- Me, My brother, My sisters and mum and dad
Why- For a fun time out
Skatepark- With my family having fun at washington,Lollies,KFC,
Fun time with mum dad and brothers and sisters,outside skatepark
Quieter pipe- Is a ramp and it is really hard to go up
Bought some food ate it before we were at Washington
Scooter brad- He is a really good at scootering The tricks that he can do he can do a flare a flare is like a 180 backflip he can do Tailwhips,tailwhips are when you're on a scooter and you spin the deck sideways and Jump back onto it that is a tailwhip he can do a quadruple tailwhip
Hook- Whooo weee this is tiring And I could hear a lot of scooters and skateboards going SWOOSH! on the ground. In the school holidays on Saturday I went to Washington Skatepark. I went with Me, My brother, My sisters and mum and dad because it was supposed to be a fun day out
I did a kickless but just failed I felt really close to getting the kickless and I saw a lot of people there because it was a very sunny day. I really wanted to try a hard trick but I did not want to hurt myself.
The way I felt was like I’m never giving up I’ve made it so close not the time to back down know. Because I've made it so close in my head I said to myself never give up you can do this. Like what teachers say at school never give up believe in yourself Persist. I got Kfc for lunch
I went there for a fun time out with the family I loved it is was so fun that I did not want to go
then once we were finished it was 3:55. So then once we got home I was really tired because of how much work I tried to do at Washington it was a really fun day. I really liked how we tried and tried till we got it I want to go back one day
It was the best day because I was so close to landing a lot of tricks.
